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DragoninDisguise
September 21, 2011, 9:53 PM
(Well this isn't really a fanfic more of a poem.)


His Soul

As I looked into his eyes
His soul
withen the quiet bedlam

two emotions stuck out

Understanding and sadness
Understanding
because he had been through this
Sadness
because he had been through worse

(I had Allelujah in mind when I wrote this. I thinking that this would be in Marie's POV, but it can be in whoever's POV you want it to be.)
EDIT: I showed this to my teacher and since bedlam was one of our vocab words, I got extra credit! :D

Kenico
September 22, 2011, 1:17 AM
Very cool man, im impressed. were you using Hiaku? just curious.

SilverFrameAstray
September 22, 2011, 5:14 AM
Not a 5/7/5 syllable structure, so no.

I do enjoy it though. I feel like poems are very much welcome to this subforum.

DragoninDisguise
September 22, 2011, 6:30 AM
Aw, thank you!

Kenico
September 22, 2011, 7:09 AM
I trust we will see more of your work in the coming future.

RX-78-2
September 22, 2011, 2:54 PM
Nice job and great work I see your an Allelujah Haptism fan.

DragoninDisguise
September 22, 2011, 5:53 PM
I trust we will see more of your work in the coming future.

Perhaps if I have another long night doing homework and being hiped up on caffeine, while also listening to Gundam music.


Nice job and great work I see your an Allelujah Haptism fan.

Thank you and yes I am a Alle fan.

RX-0
September 22, 2011, 8:45 PM
sniff it really speaks to me, but seriously really nice job

DragoninDisguise
September 22, 2011, 10:07 PM
Why, thank you!

DragoninDisguise
September 26, 2011, 3:51 PM
So I'm thinking about posting this weird dream I had after I went to bed right after doing homework while drinking soda to keep me up and listening to gundam music. (RX-0 knows what it's about.)

SilverFrameAstray
September 26, 2011, 11:00 PM
So I'm thinking about posting this weird dream I had after I went to bed right after doing homework while drinking soda to keep me up and listening to gundam music. (RX-0 knows what it's about.)

Go for it.

TwilightKing
November 16, 2011, 5:55 PM
Wow this is absolutely incredible! Truly beautiful :)

RX-0
November 18, 2011, 4:17 PM
So I'm thinking about posting this weird dream I had after I went to bed right after doing homework while drinking soda to keep me up and listening to gundam music. (RX-0 knows what it's about.)

please for the love of sanity don't

DragoninDisguise
November 30, 2012, 8:00 PM
please for the love of sanity don't

I don't even remember what it was anymore.